This was such a great story, it was more well written than most of the books I read for school. I'm hella pissed at the Commonwealth now and can't wait to destroy them and steal their technology . Also, it looks like Dalton will be a major quest giver and it will be interesting to see what he actually looks like

+1 Million

amazing....

Ho.
Ly.
Crap.

That was absolutely great!

I just printed out and read all of these in order of release and I have to say that these are really well written. Very fun serial despite frequently changing cast of characters.

Also, the editing is incredible. I only caught two mistakes in the whole serial, and I work as a tech writer. Both were in this episode:





I think I remember finding a dropped comma in an earlier episode, but I didn't mark it. Incredibly good editing.

Thank you, everyone, for all of the feedback and especially for finding any errors in the text! Don't be discouraged if you don't see the corrections implemented here on the forums; I've made all the necessary changes to the original documents, so that when they go out to the public they'll be complete.

it took me quite a while to read, but you have done an excellent job!

will all these stories end up coming together? because right now they aren't quite connected?